Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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digital era, advancement in technology has delivered a lot of benefits including quick

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communication

and connecting people to one another all around the world. A section of society

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that

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intelligence promotes harmony among

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people. Others, whilst, think that it making folks isolated,

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notions

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my perspective.

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with, having

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through the social networking sites has become an integral part of almost everyone's life. With just one or two

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on the electronic gadgets, people initiate the discussion despite

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living far from one

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other

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. These days,

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of workers migrate to other cities or countries as well.

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, they connect with their loved ones or family by using

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, that's how they stay aware and feel secure towards their family.

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whole

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has become

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globalised village, where anyone can contact any random person anytime without being

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physically

present there and both can share their cultural heritage and

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get a chance to learn

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langauge

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language

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from them.

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, making

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on social media networking

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is common, where

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especially

teenagers

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to know the foreigner and learn new things from them which

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them

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with the cultural values followed in their nation

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enforces

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sense of appreciation among them.

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, relying excessively on technology to make virtual friend has

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impact as well on the

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development of the persons because it is highly imperative to have

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person

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conversation

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with known ones which assists

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bulid

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build

confidence and

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independent

to face any

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in case they require to keep their

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of view in front of other clearly. It

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that individuals who spend

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their time on electronic gadgets start keeping

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isolated. To be more

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, they avoid

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society which results in

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low

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, it is highly likely that

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netizens suffer from mental disorders

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as anxiety and depression at a very early

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due to

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less exposure to the

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exprience

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experience

of socializing and

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a circle in which they can sit and express

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theirself

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without any conflict.

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the eminent Dr. Max

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that 65% of pupils are confronting

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insomnia and bipolar disorder because they prefer just to have virtual

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and when they

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to face other folks they get annoyed and

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frustrated

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without any particular reason In conclusion, in my point of view, a balanced

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is needed to be followed to make a lucrative usage of the technology which

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citizens to stay together and establish

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tranquility

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among the different regions by vanishing

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discrimination on the basis

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caste, religion or colour of a human being.

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deattaching

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detaching

from the

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technology

and

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new

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important to have a confident personality.

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Task Achievement

Ensure that the introduction clearly states both viewpoints along with your own opinion more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use a wider variety of linking phrases and expressions to improve the flow and clarity of your argument.

General

Pay attention to grammar and spelling in order to enhance the overall readability of your essay.

Task Achievement

You provided a balanced discussion of both viewpoints, which is essential for this type of essay.

Coherence and Cohesion

You made an effort to include examples to support your points, which adds depth to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

489 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

connectivity
communicate
social media
virtual meetings
global community
isolation
distract
face-to-face interaction
personal connections
dependency
technology addiction
digital divide

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