Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, environmental degradation is a major concern among people. Few individuals believe that
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government
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to take care of the environment.
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, opponents think that
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our responsibility to
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protect
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, I will shed light on both views and on my opinion in
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. Its true that big industries or factories are important for
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growth in every country, but there
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no
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restrictions on
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they are doing in
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people are
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struggling
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diseases
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cancer, diabities, and many more. And,
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the
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responsibility to introduce some laws for those factories, so that they should do something to stop pollution.
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, The government need to pass big budgets in the parliament for reforestation. as it's seen that the
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number of
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deforestation
in some developing nations is facing
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significant growth in
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few years and to continue
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cycle they are protesting against the government to
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them sufficient funds for planting new trees but th

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Ensure that your introduction clearly states your opinion and outlines the main points you will discuss.
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Work on the logical flow of ideas. Make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
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Use specific examples to support your arguments more effectively. For instance, consider adding statistics or specific cases related to environmental policies.
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The essay identifies the core issue of environmental responsibility well, presenting both sides of the argument clearly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental protection
  • grassroots movements
  • community-led initiatives
  • policy implementation
  • regulations
  • funding
  • innovative solutions
  • collective effort
  • advocate
  • enforce laws
  • energy-efficient
  • reduce waste
  • recycling
  • sustainable outcomes
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