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artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity, Som people think that artist should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. to what extend you agree or disagree

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Artist
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 should not be restricted to enhance innovations. Certain individuals believe that creators should be free to convey their thinking and ideas. I agree with
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 statement to a greater
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 and will give
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 in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with in the field of
art
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 whether it is painting, dancing, music or theatre,
freedom
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 of expression is required as limitations can
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harm development of the creativity.
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,
art
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 often
convey
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 social messages and
highlight
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highlights
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 the
issue
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issues
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 of
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society
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therefore
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 restricted artistic ideas can
supress
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suppress
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 of the
artist
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.
Art
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 can
be flourish
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 with limitless artistic vision, in
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 way
Freedom
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 allows
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artist
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 to deliver different perspectives and enhance the culture.
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, In
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developing countries like India, theatre
artist
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 performs on the street, and
aware
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 people about
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social issues
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 as dowry and child marriage.
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,
society
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 can understand valuable information in the form of entertainment.
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, some
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 of
art
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 can offend religious or cultural sentiments, leading to disturbance in
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society
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 a balance should be maintained to respect
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diversity and prevent conflicts.
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, some
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artist
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artists
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 promote hate speech, discrimination and violence, it can be harmful
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the
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society
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, and
sometime
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 it can
also
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 create social or religious disharmony.
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, in the movie PK, there
were
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 an
artist
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 who dressed up like
a
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lord shiva and
he
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performed
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 scene in the movie, because of
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 Hindu community’s sentiments were hurt and they asked to cut that scene from the movie.
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, there should be legal and ethical boundaries help to prevent
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extreme cases. In conclusion, artistic
freedom
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 is significant for
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cultural and intellectual growth, but it should
be come
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 with responsibilities.
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freedom
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 can create conflicts so there should be a certain limit.

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task achievement
Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and supported with clear reasoning. Some points could benefit from further explanation and detail.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and sentence structure to improve clarity. A smoother flow of ideas will enhance comprehension.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use appropriate linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more effectively between paragraphs and within your arguments.
task achievement
You demonstrated a clear position in your argument regarding artistic freedom, which is essential for a strong essay.
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Your examples, especially about social issues in India, are relevant and improve the overall quality of your argument.

Your opinion

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