You have a suggestion for a park nearby where you live. Write a letter to your city’s council. In your letter include: •what your suggestion is •why you think this suggestion will improve the park •when you would like to see this suggestion in action

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of Hill Street and I am writing
this
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letter to draw your attention to the Koln
Park
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condition.
Initially
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,
this
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green area
plays
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a significant role in our
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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thereby preservation and refurbishing it, is
of
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apply
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importance
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. If there were some
sport
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sports
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facilities in the
park
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, children would
spent
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spend
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quality time there. As the majority of
local
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the local
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population
spend
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spends
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their free time in
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park
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, providing some recreation facilities,
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as football pitches and basketball courts, can encourage youngsters to take up some physical activities
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fostering
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their
communicational
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communication
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skills. Since the summer is getting close, the
park
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should be upgraded by the end of March.
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, it would be extremely great if you could set out to do
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renovation as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Tina Ross

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Provide more specific examples of the types of sports facilities that could be added to the park to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs focus on a single idea more clearly, which can help improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
In your closing, it may be beneficial to explicitly express your hope for a positive response or action from the council.
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The letter addresses the council directly, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.
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Your concern for the community and emphasis on children's activities shows a thoughtful approach to the suggestion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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