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The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
expectaions
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expectations
 of students spent in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom through 2016,
as well as
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chart
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a chart
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 describes their sources of
income
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at
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in
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 the same year.
Overall
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, the circle shows the amount of monthly spent
of
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by
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the
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apply
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people, the greatest values are from rent,
while
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 the
least
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last
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 one is by travel. At the same time, there are remarkable
path
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paths
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 of student
income
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, which is related to their loan, with the minimum
income
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 from grants and funding. As we can see, rent
indicats
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indicates
 the half of the chart, that can hit 385
ponuds
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pounds
ponds
, with slightly spent on
the
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apply
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food which is only 124 pounds. The
others
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other
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sources
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source
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whic
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which
 are socialising, travel, bills and others are almost the same, lower than 100 pounds. with the sources of
income
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, student
loan
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loans
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 take up the biggest percentage which is 80%, despite the family
contributed
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contributing
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 to
highly
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high
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 part of
income
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 just below 79%,
as
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apply
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similer
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similar
 to
part-time
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a part-time
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job
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jobs
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 that
provide
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provides
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nearly
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a nearly
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equals
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equal
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 percentage.
However
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, savings, bank
overdraft
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overdrafts
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 and grants and funding
,
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apply
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displays
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display
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 approximately the same results.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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