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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the amount of the usual physical activities done by male and female Australians of different ages in the year 2010. The bar chart is divided into 6
age
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groups
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.
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, the females were more active than the
males
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except
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 the
males
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 between the 15 and 24
age
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group
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. The most significant gap was in the
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group
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 between 35 to 44 with a percentage of 13. In the
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group
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 65 and over, female and male activities were nearly the same.
Males
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 aged between 15 to 24 were very active compared to the other
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groups
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 and more than 50 per cent of the
males
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 were doing day-to-day exercises.
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, in the other 5
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groups
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, the percentage of the
males
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 who did regular physical activities
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 less than 50. The men aged 35 to 44 were the least active men compared with the other
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groups
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. As for the women, most active women were aged between 45 to 54 with approximately 55 per cent. The least active
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group
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 was the 65 and over.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, males, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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