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Better Driver Education for Better Driving Habits Is More Effective than Heavier Punishments for Driving Offences. To What Extent Do You Agree or Disagree

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Nowadays, driving is
an
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a

The article an may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word common.

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 common thing among people. some
peoiple
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people

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believed
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believe

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 that lessons for good driving
is
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are

The singular verb is does not appear to agree with the plural subject lessons for good driving. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 more
benificial
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beneficial

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than big punishments. If it comes to me
than
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then

The word than doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 I totally agree with
this
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 statement.
To begin
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 with,
its
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it has

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 been visible on roads that the number of accidents
are
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is

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 growing rapidly, and to control it, the government introduced multiple laws in which they punished drivers with huge
pelenties
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penalties

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or fines.
While
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,
its
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it's
it is

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 hard to pay for many people,
but
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apply

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most people
paid
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pay

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it
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for it

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.
However
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, it
doesen't
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doesn't

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help to reduce accidents on roads. So there is only one effective solution left,
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that
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and that

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 is providing education to drivers for better driving
habbits
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habits

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. Which can help new drivers to learn, how to drive safely and under rules and regulations.

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language
Use correct punctuation and grammar, particularly in terms of singular and plural forms. For example, 'an common thing' should be 'a common thing'.
content
Elaborate more on your main points to provide a clearer picture of your arguments. For example, rigorously discussing how education impacts driving habits can enhance your essay.
coherence
Make sure your ideas flow logically from one to another. You could use linking phrases to help with this, such as 'In addition' or 'Moreover'.
coherence
Conclude effectively by summarizing your main argument clearly, reinforcing your position by restating your agreement with the statement.
task achievement
You present a clear stance on the topic, showing your agreement with the statement. This is important for task achievement.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and has relevant ideas regarding improving driving habits through education.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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