Some people think that living in a country is essential to learn that country’s language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of people believe that
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residing in a country is mandatory to learn its
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and culture.
This
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with the statement.
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cause is communication with the locals. when you move to
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with different traditions and
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, even though you learn it
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but
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it still helps you to improve the
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when you communicate with
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native speakers.
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, when a student
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to Canada though he
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a test for
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still he will learn new words from the locals of
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who use it as their first
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, there is
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idiom that goes when you are in
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behave like one, so to understand the
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culture
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it is better to experience it in person.
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, in Asian countries, everyone reads about
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but no one knows how to celebrate it properly and when they move to
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they learn what to do for
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, the modern technology is vast and you can learn or experience anything from your home.
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, you live in India and
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to learn
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. You will have online access to institutions in
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. Other than that, for some communities, there can be
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cultural
shocks when they experience it
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people, wearing jeans and small tops can be a big shock. To sum it up, there
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many advantages to
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in
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the country
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to learn
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and culture which outweigh the disadvantages. It is necessary to do research properly before moving to
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Task Achievement
Your introduction could be clearer. It is important to restate the question and outline your stance explicitly. Instead of saying 'This essay will explain the reasons why its agree with the statement,' you could say 'I fully agree with the statement that living in a country is essential for learning its language and culture.'
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on your sentence structure and grammar. There were several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'by residing in a country is mandatory' (should be 'that residing in a country is mandatory') and 'there is a idiom' (should be 'there is an idiom'). These errors can affect the clarity of your writing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to include clear transitions between your ideas to enhance flow. Phrases like 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' and 'On the other hand' can help organize your paragraphs more effectively.
Task Achievement
While you provided examples, ensure they are fully developed and clearly linked to your main points. For instance, when discussing learning about Christmas in Europe, you might explain what specific aspects are learned and why that is significant.
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You have made an attempt to provide examples which support your points. This shows an understanding of how to strengthen your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the main ideas presented in the essay, which is good practice.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • acquisition
  • nuances
  • idiomatic expressions
  • context
  • global connectivity
  • cultural programs
  • media consumption
  • firsthand experience
  • frequent opportunities
  • substantial understanding
  • cultural shock
  • alternative methods
  • viable options
  • natural interaction
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