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Band 4.5

In many countries, plastic shopping bags are the main type of rubbish. They cause water and land pollution, so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In several states,
plastic
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 shopping
bags
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 are the main
sort
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source
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 of rubbish. They
result
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result in
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 water and land contamination.
As a
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result
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 they ought to be banned. I completely agree
to
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with
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this
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 statement as shopping
bags
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 that
made
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are made
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 of
plastics
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plastic
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 are very hard to
process
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 by the earth.
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, an alternative
of
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to
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 those kinds of things should be proposed in
order
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 to push down the water and
soil
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 pollution rate.
Plastics
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Plastic
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 shopping
bags
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 are extremely hard to
process
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 by the earth, especially the
soil
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.
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, the
process
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need
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 a hundred years to be decomposed.
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,
the
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plastics
are
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have been
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 widely used in recent decades, so the decomposing
process
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need
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 a very long time.
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, a
plastic
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 bag can pollute any type of environment because
they
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have
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 a long time before disappears.
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, it should be restricted.
The alternatives
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of
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to
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plastic
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bags
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 should be proposed in
order
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 to replace
it
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them
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.
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, for some people, shopping is a thing that they can not ignore in
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 to feed their
familiy
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family
 members, so the alternative, whether it is regulations or things ought to be offered.
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, the government can encourage people to bring their own
bags
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 for shopping.
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, the regulation might solve the
enviromental
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environmental
 problems and not
causing
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cause
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 any problems for the daily activities. In conclusion,
plastic
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bags
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are need
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 a really long time before
it
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they
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decomposed
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decompose
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by
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in
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 the
soil
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. It needs to be restricted in
order
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 to keep the water and
soil
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 safe.
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, the alternative
of
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to
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plastic
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bags
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 needs to be undertaken by the government. Encouraging people to bring their own shopping
bag
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bags
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 is one of the
solution
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solutions
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.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the topic. Additionally, try to rephrase the prompt to provide a more comprehensive overview of your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer logical structure by clearly separating your points into distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, making it easier for the reader to follow.
task achievement
Expand on your examples with more specific details to strengthen your arguments. Providing more context can make your ideas clearer and more impactful.
task achievement
You clearly express your opinion on the subject matter, demonstrating a consistent stance throughout the essay.
task achievement
You identify the environmental issue caused by plastic bags and suggest possible solutions, indicating awareness of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecological impact
  • marine and terrestrial ecosystems
  • decompose
  • wildlife
  • urban waste management
  • clog drainage systems
  • sustainable alternatives
  • reusable cloth bags
  • waste and pollution reduction
  • economic incentives
  • eco-friendly products
  • phased approach
  • public participation
  • compliance
  • public awareness campaigns
  • long-term benefits
  • community support
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