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The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same work or the same work conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare for people to work in the future.

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In the contemporary world, the question of what
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the possible causes and solutions of a quick change in the world of
work
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has
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 sparked considerable heated debates and discussions in different communities. In the following paragraph, I will comprehensively shed light on the root causes of
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 trend,
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 as the
development
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 of
technology
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,
fast-paced
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 environment and
strong
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 purpose of becoming
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, and make suggestions to employees in order to survive in
cut-throat
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the cut-throat
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 competitive workplace,
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development
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the development
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 of certain
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.
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development
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the development
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 of
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, specifically artificial intelligence, meaning that these cutting-edge technologies,
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 as robots, are becoming favourable
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 compared to
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 workforce to employers because they are able to
work
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consistency
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 and
persistency
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, and they never catch a cold. The prime example can be
manufacturing
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 and production industry
that
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 workers
of
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 plants and factories are mostly robots. Another principal cause is
fast-paced
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 environment that individuals should make more money in order to pay basic living expenses,
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 as food, rent and taxes.
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, residents of the capital of my country are working numerous jobs these days.
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least, the purpose of becoming rich can be regarded as a key driving force.
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further
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 assessment of the issue can help elaborate on other possible factors playing a pivotal role in the emergence of
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development
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, these three identified causes remain the
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leading contributors. Given the complex nature of the problem discussed above, there is a wide range of actions
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 be taken in order to arrest
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 trend. One of the most significant viable solutions is
tdeveloping
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developing
 certain
skills
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,
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 as creativity, critical thinking, multitasking, and conflict management that can be the most
appreciating
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skills
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. To illustrate
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technology
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 nor artificial intelligence can deal with certain situations that human beings can do.
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, an abundance of people
work
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 in the markets, arts and psychology fields.
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, leadership, teamwork and time management
skills
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 can be beneficial for employees to compete with modern
technology
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.
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, the notion of working in a team
is not exist
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 in robots or artificial intelligence. In conclusion, it is true that the world of
work
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 is changing dramatically
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 considerable advancements in
technology
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,
fast-paced
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 environment and the purpose of making more money.
However
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, there can be a number of effective solutions
to
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 workers
so as
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to remain competitive in the workplace,
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 as
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development
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the development
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 of certain
skills
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.

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task achievement
Rewrite the introduction for clarity by directly stating the main causes and solutions you plan to discuss, to better set the context for the reader.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that every sentence contributes to that idea, which will enhance coherence and cohesion further.
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Use more varied examples to strengthen your argument and illustrate your points more effectively; this will enhance the relevance of your examples.
task achievement
Strong identification of key causes affecting the changing world of work, highlighting relevant factors like technology and economic pressures.
coherence
Clear structure with defined paragraphs that help guide the reader through your argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • gig economy
  • freelance
  • contract work
  • globalization
  • interconnected economy
  • work-life balance
  • market instability
  • economic fluctuations
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