Apologizing for accidentally breaking your friend's belonging.

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Dear Sara, I am writing
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letter to apologize for accidentally breaking your mobile contact. I went to Marina's birthday party three days ago. Since I was in a hurry, I accidentally left my
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at home. That's why I borrowed your
phone
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for two hours. I took your
phone
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to take a selfie. Suddenly, I dropped your iPhone
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I was taking a photo at the birthday photo backdrop and your
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's screen and corners cracked. I am really sorry for breaking your
phone
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. I will compensate all expenses for the
phone
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repair.
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, if you want a new iPhone, I will buy one for you. I would be grateful if you provide me with some information about your
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model. I kindly request that you accept my apology. Once again, I am very sorry for
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and I appreciate your understanding. I hope
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does not affect our friendship. Yours truly, Billura.

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Ensure your introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter immediately. This sets the tone and shows intent right away.
coherence and cohesion
Consider a clearer concluding statement that reinforces your request for forgiveness and summarizes your remorse.
coherence and cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structures a bit more to enhance the flow of your writing. This can help engagement and maintain the reader's interest.
task achievement
Your letter effectively conveys your apology and intention to make amends, showcasing a good understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
The narrative of how the accident happened is clearly articulated, allowing the reader to follow the sequence of events well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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