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Band 2.5

The plan below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The given maps do
a
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the
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 comparison of
outline
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the outline
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 of a harbour, from 2000 to the current time.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that most of the areas are located at the same location, but the castle is converted into to hotel and additional showers and toilets are constructed nowadays.
According to
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 the map, In 2000, the main road was led to the car parks,
as well as
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 to
life boats
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lifeboats
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. Right now, the castle converted into a hotel for tourists and the public beach has
also
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 been converted into a private beach for hotel members.
However
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,
lifeboat
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the lifeboat
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located
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was located
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 at the same point in both years.
Moreover
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, a new shower and toilet
is build
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is built
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 near the car park areas. Fishing boats and marine(private yachts) areas just change their location with each other.
In addition
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 , extra
ferrie
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ferries
 for passengers and dock for the boat is added in current time.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider improving the clarity of comparisons by explicitly stating the changes between the two time periods. Use linking words to help connect your ideas more effectively.
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Make sure to use varied vocabulary and accurate grammar to convey your points smoothly. For instance, double-check phrases like 'converted into to hotel' which should be 'converted into a hotel'.
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The essay presents a clear overview of the changes in the harbour, which sets a good foundation for the comparison.
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You have effectively noted some key changes, such as the conversion of the castle and the addition of showers and toilets, which are relevant to the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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