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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The provided maps reveal the development of a university's
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sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 at present and in future. Looking briefly at
layout
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the layout
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 at present in more
details
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detail
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 indicates that there was
a
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an
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 indoor area in the middle of the layout and two outdoor courts were located at the left and right
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side
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 of it. The indoor hall
contaied
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contained
 a reception on the bottom, a seating and a changing room on the right and
left hand
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left-hand
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side
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, respectively.
Moreover
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, there was a gym
on
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in
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 the north and
pool
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a pool
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 was situated in the middle of
a
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an
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 indoor facility. When it comes to future plans
of
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for
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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, two outdoor courts will be eliminated and the main indoor area will be extended
dramaticaly
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dramatically
. On the left
side
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 of
layout
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the layout
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, two dance studios, a changing room, a cafe and a sports hall will be
contructed
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constructed
. On the west
side
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 of
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sport
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the sport
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center
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, it is anticipated that a
leisuer
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leisure
 pool, another changing room and a sports shop will be established in the near future. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the
unversity's
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university's
university
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sport
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sports
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center
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 will be transformed significantly in the
forecoming
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coming
 years and more indoor facilities will be
contructed
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constructed
 for
convenience
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the convenience
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 of visitors.

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task achievement
Your introduction is clear, but it could be strengthened by explicitly stating the main changes between the current and future layouts. Consider summarizing these key changes in the introduction for a stronger foundation.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words or phrases to improve the flow of your writing. For example, use transitions like 'firstly', 'in addition', and 'finally' to guide the reader through your description more logically.
language accuracy
Be careful with typos and minor errors. For example, 'contaied' should be 'contained', and 'dramatically' is misspelled as 'dramaticaly'. Proofreading your work can help avoid these issues.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear overview of the current and future state of the sports center, which is essential for task achievement.
task achievement
You have made a good attempt at describing the individual components of the sports center, showcasing some understanding of what changes will occur.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • redevelopment
  • expansion
  • modern amenities
  • recreational activities
  • cater
  • enhancement
  • aesthetics
  • accommodate
  • upgraded
  • welcoming
  • significantly expanded
  • current layout
  • future layout
  • gym enthusiasts
  • modernized
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