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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The provided bar chart compares how households spent their weekly income in terms of food, housing,
fuel
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 and
power
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, clothing and footwear, household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, transport and
leisure
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 in 1968 and
in
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2018. Looking at
datas
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data
 in more detail reveals that families allocated the largest proportion of their weekly budget to buying
foods
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food
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 in 1968, accounting for 35%,
while
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 it experienced a dramatic reduction over the period, reaching nearly 17%. In a similar
vein
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 the proportion of expenditure on
fuel
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 and
power
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, clothing and personal
goods
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 was higher in 1968 than those in 2018.
In addition
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,
fuel
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 and
power
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 had the lowest percentage in 1968. The share of household
goods
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 remained constant from 1968 to 2018.
In contrast
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, the expenditure of people on housing, transport and
leisure
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 increased significantly over the given period. The spending on
leisure
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 and housing was noticeably higher than other categories in 2018, accounting for 32% and 28%, respectively.
In addition
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,
fuel
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 and
power
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 had the lowest percentage in 1968,
while
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 both clothing and personal
goods
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 had the lowest proportion in 2018. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the spending on food experienced a significant decline in 2018 and households
prefered
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prefer
 to allocate their weekly income to
leisure
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 activities and housing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, power, goods, leisure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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