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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how frequently
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the population
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 of
USA
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the USA
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 ate convenience food
during
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 10 years. First of
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 we saw two
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 picked at the highest point two times ,
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 between years. One of them reached
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the
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 highest point
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 2006.
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, it was about who ate once a week.
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 one was picked at the highest point
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 2013. If
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 not mistaken in 2003
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the percentage
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 of people who ate every day and who ate never more than
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 other years,
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, it was 4
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 who grabbed all day and
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 it was 5 proportion who ate never.the graph of 2003 increased sharply and dropped rapidly. As I
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 percentage of people who ate fast food in 2006 and 2013 remained stable 3 times. First time they remained stable
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every day.The percentage of people eating at fast-food restaurants once or twice a month remained relatively high throughout the period, with a slight increase in 2013, making it the most

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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