the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

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e-commerce

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on e-commerce

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parts in various categories

Canada

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in Canada

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in the years

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2005 and 2010.

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it is clear that

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there

ars

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are

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downwords

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downwards

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in the two proportions(Electronic and

Appliannce

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Appliance

,Home Furnishing).

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Food and

Bevarge

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Beverage

, Video Games showed

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towards

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in the next year. In 2005, the electronic and

applience

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appliance

depicted

increase

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an increase

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35% and home furnishings to 25% but in 2010 both of them showed

decrease

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a decrease

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electronic

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in electronic

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appliance

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appliances

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to 30 percentage and home furnishing

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15% respectively.

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apply

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Food and Beverage

rised

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raised

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rose

from 22% to 32% and video games enlarged from 18

percent

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per cent

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to 23

percen

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per cent

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

101 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

retail sectors
online shopping sales
significant growth/decline
consumer behavior
market trends
economic factors
technological advancements
sales percentages
emerged
evolution
notable
constancies

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the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

many people today have to spend long periods of time working and living away from home. Does this have more advantages or more disadvantages for the people involved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive at the destination. Write a letter to the post office manager. In your letter, give details of the situation describe the documents say what action you want the post office to take

There is a problem in your street. Write a letter to the local town council explaining who you are, what the problem is and what you hope will be done about it.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house of building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?