the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in canada in 2005 and 2010

the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in canada in 2005 and 2010
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in canada in 2005 and 2010
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The two pie charts illustrate the
e - commerce
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e-commerce
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sales for
retail
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a retail
the retail
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part in Canada in the years
of
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apply
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2005 and 2010. It is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
that in 2010 food and Beverage age and video games recorded upward
while
Linking Words
electronics
and
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apply
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appliance
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appliances
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and home furnishings saw
dawnwarded
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downward
. Online
sell
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sales
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make up 32% of the
food beverage
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food-beverage
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age

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail sectors
  • online shopping sales
  • significant growth/decline
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • sales percentages
  • emerged
  • evolution
  • notable
  • constancies
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