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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart depicts the amount of
travel
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 conducted
during
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between
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 1990 and 2010 by children in one country using various transportation methods. In the year 1990,
majority
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the majority
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 of children walked to school. More than 12
million
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 trips were accounted
by
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for by
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 walking to and from school. Children relied on
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the bus
a bus
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bus
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buses
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 and
cycle
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cycles
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 were only half of walking. More than 6
million
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 and a little more than six
million
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 trips
completed
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were completed
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 using
bus
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buses
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 and cycling. During 2010, more
number of
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apply
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journey
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the journey
a journey
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completed
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were completed
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 using
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the car
a car
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car
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cars
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. More than 10
million
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travel
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 made by
car
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, followed by walking and bus with 6
million
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 and
and
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less than 6
million
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 trips respectively. The least total of
travel
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 was completed by cycle. In 1990, walking was the main source of
travel
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 to and from school and
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car
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the car
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 was the least preferred method of transportation,
whereas
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in
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, in
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 2010,
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car
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the car
a car
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 became
the
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apply
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commonly
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most commonly
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 used
while
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 walking stands
on
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at
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 the bottom of the table

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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, million, car with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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