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The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999.

The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999.
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The Line chart displays the
traveller's numbers
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number of travellers
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 from Britain to other
countries
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 and
visitors
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 to Britain from other
countries
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 between 1979 and 1999.
Also
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, the bar graph illustrates the most popular
countries
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 that were visited by
UK
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residents
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 in the
year
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 1999.
Overall
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, it is evident that
with
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 the years passed the amount of people from the
UK
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 visiting other
countries
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 and
visitors
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 coming to visit the
UK
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 has increased.
Whereas
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, as per the bar
graph
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graph,
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 most popular tourist destination for
UK
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residents
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 was France and the least popular was Turkey. On the one hand, In the
year
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 1979 amount of people visiting abroad
by
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UK
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residents
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 was around 12
million
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, which surged gradually until 1986 after that it experienced a sudden dramatic increase and reached approximately 52
million
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 in 1999.
Moreover
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, the same pattern was seen in the number of
visitors
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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, which started at just 10
million
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 and reached around 30
million
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 by the
year
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 1999.
On the other hand
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, the most popular tourist destination for
UK
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residents
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 was France with 11
million
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visitors
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 in the
year
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 1999.
Furthermore
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, the second most popular country was Spain with 9
million
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visitors
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 and other
countries
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such
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 as the USA, Greece, and Turkey were visited by under 5
million
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residents
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. Of the three of country, the least popular was Turkey as per the graph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, visitors, uk, residents, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuate/fluctuations
  • significant increase/decrease
  • reach a peak
  • hit a low
  • steady rise
  • sharp decline
  • popular destination
  • economic conditions
  • travel regulations
  • cultural factors
  • tourism
  • international travel
  • visitor numbers
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