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Band 3.5

You are going away from home for one week and you need to ask your neighbour to look after your house why you want to go away what you want your neighbour to look after if there are any problems then give instructions

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Dear Reeta, I hope
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 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits.I am writing
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 letter to request you to take care of my home because I have planned to go on a trip with my family members next week.You informed me that you are coming .I want to request you to check my house every day. My pet dog is familiar with you so I need your help to feed and look after him.As you know, I have many plants in my garden,which need to be watered every day. I ordered some clothes online and, these will be shipped on 17 March at 2p.m .Please check our post box every day
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morning
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the morning
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 to get a newspaper. A plumber will come to repair our sink because It is totally blocked,I gave your contact number so that you can tell the problem of the sink. Thank you for all your help and I will try to meet you soon.
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 Faithfully Aman

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The introduction is friendly and sets the tone, but you could improve it by briefly stating the purpose of the trip to make your request clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your sentences flow smoothly. For example, you could use linking words like 'Additionally' or 'Furthermore' to connect ideas more logically.
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Consider being more specific in some areas. For example, clarify what kind of problems might arise with the dog or plants, so your neighbor knows how to address them.
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You have provided a clear and polite request, which is important for effective communication.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter contains specific details, like the arrival of the clothes and the need for the plumber, which helps the reader understand their responsibilities.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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