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Band 5

You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: ● introduce yourself ● explain what sort of job you would like ●say what experience and skills you have.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. My name is Sumanpreet Kaur and I am on work permit. I am currently residing at 141
vodden street
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Vodden Street
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, east in Brampton, Ontario. I am writing
this
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 letter to you regarding a part-time job. Moving forward, I am seeking
job
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a job
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 related to
machine
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 operator. It should be in the manufacturing company which includes packaging , processing or paning
machine
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operator
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operators
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. I can do one out of
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 above in
production
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the production
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 area. I completed my graduation in the
mechincal
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mechanical
engerring
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engineering
 that's the reason I am interested in those mentioned jobs.
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this
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, I have volunteer experience
of
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as
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packaging
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a packaging
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machine
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operater
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operator
 in
the
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apply
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my college for 6 months.
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, I took
interships
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internships
also
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 related to the
machine
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 operator job in
the
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a
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well known
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well-known
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 food factory. Thank you for considering my request and I am waiting for your reply. If you need anything about my skills please feel free to reach
.
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out.
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 Yours sincerely, Suman

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate the content into paragraphs: one for introduction, one for the job desired, and another for your skills and experiences.
task achievement
Consider using more precise language when describing your experience, for example, specify the type of machinery or tasks for better clarity.
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Your introduction is polite and provides a clear identification of yourself.
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You provided relevant information about your experiences and education, which supports your job application.
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