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You have seen an advertisement from a couple who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year Write a letter to the cop in your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job. Say what else you could do for the family give me a reason for wanting to job.

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Dear
sir
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/Mam I am writing with regard to an advertisement that
i
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 had seen on
facebook
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Facebook
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 which says you are looking for an educator to teach the English
language
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 to your two
children
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. I am Hushanpreet
kaur
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Kaur
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, 21 years old and
i
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had
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 done my senior secondary education
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 the
language
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 test. I had two years of experience in teaching the English
language
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 where
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 had taught almost
thousand
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 of students.
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,
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 like to engage with people and
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 love to help them. I am pursuing early childhood education and
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 have
keen
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 interest
to work
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in working
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 with
children
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 where
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 can help them
to
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enhance their cognitive, social,
emotional
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 skills
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the
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language
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 and communication.
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,
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 can help the family by doing their work, helping them in household chores and office work as well. I
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 know driving and
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 can manage to
pickup
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pick up
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 and drop off your
children
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 from
schools
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. As
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 am pursuing ECE and
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 want a job that includes working with
children
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 to practice and enhance my skills
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 it
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 can stay fluent and consistent with the English
language
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 by teaching. I hope you will consider my application and reply soon.
your
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 faithfully

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language
Make sure to use proper capitalization, especially for 'I' and proper nouns. Consider addressing the couple directly in the greeting if known.
structure
To improve coherence, use clearer transitions between your reasons and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
content
You have effectively conveyed your qualifications and experience in teaching English, which is great for task achievement.
content
Your willingness to help the family with household duties shows good initiative and a comprehensive approach to the role.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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