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The line graph below shows the avarage monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the avarage monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chat gives information about the average monthly temperatures in Paris, Dubai and Sydney from January to
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December
Decamber
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December
Overall
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, Dubai and Paris showed an increase in temperature at the beginning of the year, and both cities showed their peak in August.
Although
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 Sydney
start
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starts
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 with the highest
but
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it goes for the lowest temperatures in July. Dubai and Paris start with 20 and 5 degrees Celsius, respectively, to
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reach
reache
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reach
 the highest number in July
then
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 both of them decline
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until
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 December
On the other hand
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Sydeny
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Sydney
start
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with
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at
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 25 Celsius in
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the july
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july
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July
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 period was the lowest average temperature
for
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below
is
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degree.
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, closer to the end of the year it is visible from the data that Sydney can increase to
be
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more degree than both of the cities .

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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