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The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
tourists
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 who visited a particular Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017, categorized by
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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,
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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, and the total
number
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 of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 increased significantly over the period, rising from about 1
million
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 in 2010 to around 3.5
million
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 in 2017. By the end of the period, more
tourists
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 were staying on
cruise
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ships
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 than on the
island
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.
In particular
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, the figure for
cruise
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 ship
visitors
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 climbed dramatically (especially after 2015),
whereas
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 the
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on the
island
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 grew more gradually and even
leveled
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 off for a few years. In 2010, roughly 0.3
million
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tourists
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 stayed on
cruise
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ships
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.
This
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number
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 dipped slightly in 2011 but
then
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 rose steadily in subsequent years. By 2015 it had reached about 1.5
million
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, and it continued to increase, reaching a peak of 2.0
million
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visitors
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 in 2017 who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who stayed on the
island
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 was higher than the
cruise
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 ship figure at the start, at around 0.7
million
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 in 2010.
This
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 figure grew to approximately 1.5
million
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 by 2013, after which it plateaued (remaining nearly unchanged through 2014 and 2015). The count dipped slightly in 2016
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 but rose again to finish at about 1.5
million
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 in 2017. Despite
this
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 recovery, by 2017 the
island
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 stay
visitors
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 (1.5
million
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) were still fewer than those on
cruise
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ships
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 (2
million
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).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, island, visitors, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dipped" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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