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The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates information about the average cheese
consumption
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 individually in different 5 countries from 1980 to 2020.
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, it can be notably seen that England is one of the most regions
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consumption
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 level, whereby Scotland and Wales have less capacity.
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 Nothern Ireland is the lowest region in the UK.
According to
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 the graph, in England cheese
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 level started at approximately 110kg, but
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 level had a slight decrease of roughly 90kg till 2020. Scotland is another country which started at around 80kg but
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 rate rose to above 100 .
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, cheese
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 in Scotland fell to 55kg in 2020. In terms of the lowest regions, Wales started at 45kg have fluctuated till 1990, after remaining constant, it rose to around 80kg. Interestingly,
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 Northern Ireland was the lowest country in 1980 it rose to 30 in 2000
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 and increased to 60kg by 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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