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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
provide
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 information about the distribution of police budget in different sectors
such
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 as national
goverment
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government
 local taxes and other sources and the pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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utilizing
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 of money
in
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for
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 various
purpose
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purposes
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: officers and staff income, technology and buildings and transport between 2017 and 2018 in England.
Overall
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, the total number of cops funding had
moderate
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moderately
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 increased and
majority
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the majority
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 of
expendition
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expedition
expenditure
 was officers
abd
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and
 staff earnings. Focusing on
budgets
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budget
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 allocation, the number of national
goverment
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government
governments
have
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has
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 slightly
increase
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increased
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 from 175.5m to 177.8m.
Moreover
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, the highest growth was in the local taxes sector from 91.2m to 102.3m.
In contrast
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, there was a
miginal
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marginal
minimal
magical
 increase in other sources
for
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of
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 0.5m, from 38m in 2017.
Lastly
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, the sum of
table
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the table
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 was 304.7m and 318.6m
from
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in
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 2017 and 2018 respectively. Turning to the pie charts, the
expendition
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expedition
expenditure
 of building and transport was
unchangable
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unchangeable
 at 17%. The money was
using
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used
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 the most in salaries for officers and staff which accounted for 75% and 69% in 2017 and 2018, respectively.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, the amount of technology in 2017 was almost
the
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apply
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twice as
many
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much
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 as
2018
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in 2018
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 at 8% and 14%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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