Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with others people and get new events. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In modern times, the use of social

media

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people to keep in touch with recent events and people. Like every type of communication

media

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that exists before social

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, it

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comes with advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages

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outweigh the disadvantages, and

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will break

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it down

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into some points. One, it helps us to stay informed about whatever happens with others and events we are interested in, no matter where we are. Two, not only we can keep up, by staying in touch with people using social

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can

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open new

opportunity

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for us, in other places that we might never

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. Three, we can

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learn something new

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and

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able to create new

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relationships

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, in terms of professional or even personal. For me personally, the disadvantage of social

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is it requires us to be mature and wise, so we can control anything we consume from it.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Consider providing a more detailed conclusion that summarizes your main points and clearly states your final opinion. This will enhance the overall clarity and end your essay more effectively.

Task Achievement

Try to elaborate a bit more on the disadvantages of social media to balance your argument. This will demonstrate a more comprehensive understanding of the topic.

Grammar and Language Use

Make sure to proofread your essay to catch minor grammatical errors and improve the fluency of your sentences. For instance, 'the advantages does outweigh' should be 'the advantages do outweigh'.

Task Achievement

You clearly state your opinion at the beginning and provide multiple supporting points, which is a good approach to structuring your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

157 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

global community
maintain relationships
immediate updates
self-expression
networking opportunities
overuse
misinformation
privacy concerns
personal data
culture of comparison
decreased self-esteem
dissatisfaction

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Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with others people and get new events. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

When new towns are planned, it is more important to include public parks and sports facilities than shopping centres for people to spend their free time in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is often said that governments spend too much mo ey on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems. That are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

Violence in the media promotes violence in society to what extent do you agree or disagree.

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?