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Some people believe that Newspapers are the best way to get news. Others believes people can rely on other effective media. Discuss 2 views and give your own opinion.

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: Some
people
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 have a different view about how they receive
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 or
news
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While
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 some
people
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 think that
newspapers
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 are the best
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 to catch up
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 latest
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 , other believes
people
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 can rely on other effective
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However
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,
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 think that every
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 has its positive and negative
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. We can’t deny that
newspapers
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 provide readers
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lot of advantages .
Firstly
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,
newspapers
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 are clearly suitable for elder
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, who can’t listen well or misunderstand digital
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 a lot of Japanese
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 still keep
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 habit of reading a newspaper every morning to know more about what
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 around the world .
Moreover
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, the traditional
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 can help us focus on
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 and lessen the risk of
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 from time-wasting distractions.
On the other hand
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 , alternative
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, mainly online platforms, has unique advantages that traditional
newspapers
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 do not . In the first place ,
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 always update
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 and
news
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 quickly so that we can read an abundance of
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 on a board of technological devices and don’t have to waste a huge of money
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 a newspaper.
In addition
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, now
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 are busy, they don’t have time to read
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 and
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 but some kind of
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do
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 not need us to read, we can just hear it.
For
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 65% of
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 in Vietnam buy a
televison
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television
 to listen to the
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 . In conclusion, depending on each person’s conditions and preferences,
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 can choose the best
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 to learn
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that arguments are clearly structured and linked to improve flow.
task achievement
Use a wider range of vocabulary for clarity and precision.
task achievement
You presented both views clearly and provided personal opinion, which is strong for task achievement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news coverage
  • perspectives
  • opinions
  • accessed
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • real-time
  • multimedia
  • combination
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