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The diagram below illustrates how a simple water filter is constructed and how it functions to produce clean drinking water. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below illustrates how a simple water filter is constructed and how it functions to produce clean drinking water. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram indicates the simple filtering
water
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 system and the process of obtaining clean drinking
water
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 from contaminated one.
Overall
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, it is evident that there are various steps to produce uncontaminated
water
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, starting with unclean H2O and finishing with a drinking
water
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 storage tank.
At
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In
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 the beginning,
this
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 filter assembly combine two tanks to produce clean drinking liquid.
Then
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 you have to remove the
platic
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plastic
 lid away, pouring the dirty
water
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 into
bucket
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a bucket
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. After pouring it down, there are three layers of filter, sand at the top, charcoal at the middle and gravel at the bottom,
then
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 the
water
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 will be thoroughly filtered by three substances respectively.
Then
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 the drinking H2O will be sent to the drinking
water
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 storage tank through the
conncection
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connection
 of
pipe
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a pipe
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bewtween
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between
 two tanks.
Besides
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, there is a faucet equipped at the right corner of
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the
a
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storage tank, in order to supply drinking
water
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 when
requiring
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required
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 with a cup.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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