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Band 4.5

Some people believe that when designing a building, the most important thing to be considered is the function rather than the outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that some people find that the primary purpose of a building should be taken
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 consideration over how it looks to the public when it is in the design phase.
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 essay firmly disagrees with
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 that it should look appealing to the public. Factors
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 as its architectural design and use of different
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 play a role in the final criteria of a
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 building. Looking at our
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 history, ancient structures are not praised for their simple features and function but rather for
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 magnificent structural designs. Modern-day
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 that have been constructed by focusing on their outer appearance tend to grasp more attention of the public causing an increase of feet through the doors
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 curiosity. The tallest building in the world, which is situated in Dubai is not visited
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 its 340 flight of stairs but rather for their out of the ordinary look. Using a specific combination of
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 will attract people to a building and cause a more fitting scene to the environment. Just like bees that are attracted to the beautiful
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 of flowers, so are humans to
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. Studies find that 80% of people will feel more comfortable in a building
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 outer appearance is painted. A building
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 painted with
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 complimenting each
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 as white and grey, will be more attractive than and plain building that has no coated layers on the outside. In conclusion factors
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 as the colour combination and unique design feature overpowers the importance of the function of a building making appearance more applicable.

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Task Achievement
Ensure that your main argument is supported by thorough evidence and engage critically with the alternative viewpoint.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use transitional phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs, improving the overall flow of your argument.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear position on the topic, strongly asserting that appearance is more important than function.
Task Achievement
The use of examples such as the tallest building in Dubai effectively illustrates the point about the appeal of architectural design.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetics
  • functionality
  • architectural integrity
  • practicality
  • usability
  • form versus function
  • cost efficiency
  • user-centric design
  • cultural value
  • emotional impact
  • architectural landmark
  • tourism appeal
  • practical design features
  • maintenance costs
  • safety considerations
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