Some people believe that having a pet such as a cat or a dog helps old people to have a more enjoyable life and to stay healthier. How do you think old people benefit from having a pet?Do you think there are any problems in old people having a pet?

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On the earth, different
people
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are living. Some
people
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think that having a
pet
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is
enjoyable
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an enjoyable
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life and it helps those
people
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to make their life happy.
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While others
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Others
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are thinking
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think
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that having
cat
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a cat
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or dog is
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a drawbacks
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drawbacks
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and it does not help to make their life happier than having a
pet
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.
This
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essay will discuss both views and in the conclusion, I will clearly state my
postion
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position
on
this
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issue.
Firstly
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,
category
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the category
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of old
people
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want
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who want
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to have a
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, but
they
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apply
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do not have
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the conditon
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conditon
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conditions
and money for
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a
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pet
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. The
pet
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needs
look
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after
as
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apply
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like the child. I do not say a son or a
pet
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is the same, but it needs attention,
such
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as
,
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feeding, vaccinations and
another
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other
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home
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staff. To take
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the car
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car
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care
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all
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of all
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this
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these
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things together and pay attention is really
difficulte
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difficult
.
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, at the
house
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house,
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pets love
,
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when they are
toring
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touring
or breaking the furniture.
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, those
people
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are
lazy
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too lazy
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to have a
pet
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at
home
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.
On the other hand
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, category of
people
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think differently and love the
pet
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at
home
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, they can not
sleeping
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without a
pet
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.
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, I know my friend, who has got 4
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pet
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pets
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at
home
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and she sleeps with them.
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, her
perents
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parents
are sharing the same vibe and doing the same. Her
perents
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parents
are more
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then
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than
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fifty years old and
to
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apply
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having a
pet
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, it was their idea. By the way, her father is
qualified
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a qualified
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vet and he
inform
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us that the cats know where the person has got
injury
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an injury
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and it will sit exactly there. In conclusion, for me, if
i
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I
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had a
pet
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,
i
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I
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would love it.
Furthermore
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, I would like to
hava
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have
a
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, because from my point of view, sometimes pets give me good feelings and force me to forget my problems and look after
on
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apply
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the pets.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity of your ideas by rephrasing some sentences for better understanding. For example, reword 'this essay will discuss both views and in the conclusion, I will clearly state my postion on this issue.' to a more formal tone like 'This essay will explore both perspectives and conclude with my personal viewpoint on the issue.'
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Use more precise language and correct a few grammatical errors such as 'difficulte' (should be 'difficult') and 'hava' which should be 'have'. This will enhance the overall clarity of your essay.
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Make sure to provide clearer examples that are directly related to the topic. For instance, when citing your friend who has pets, explain more about how exactly they benefit her parents’ lives instead of generalize 'it was their idea'.
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Your essay offers a balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of having pets for older people, which is a strong approach.
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You provide personal anecdotes, which enhance engagement and add a personal touch to your writing.
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