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Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore, it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

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I think that it is not enough to use machine translation for the children and it is necessary for children to learn a foreign language and
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 because learning
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 them learn about the
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 important to learn other languages because it helps the kids to
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 the machine to teach the kids the other languages and
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 children from other cultures to gether.

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grammar
Try to improve grammatical accuracy, such as spacing between words, spelling errors, and sentence structure to enhance clarity.
coherence
Ensure that your points are clearly separated and elaborated to enhance the logical structure of your essay.
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Include specific examples or scenarios to support your arguments, which will help in providing a comprehensive response.
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You have expressed a clear opinion on the importance of learning foreign languages alongside using machine translation.
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You highlight the cultural understanding that comes with learning a language, which is a valuable point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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