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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the percentages of Australian exports to Japan,
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the Us
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Us
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US
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, China and India since 1990.
Overall
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, Japan shows the highest
percent
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percentage
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 in the graph
while
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, India and China
indicates
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have
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 the lowest values.
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Along with
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With
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United
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the United
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State
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States
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has
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taken
the
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in the
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 middle part of the graph. At the beginning of the period, Japan
start
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started
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 with just above 25% in 1990 the display dramatically
decline
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declined
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 through the years with the minimum
percent
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per cent
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 in 2012. The US, represent
remarkable
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a remarkable
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fluctuate
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, which hit the maximum in 2000
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then
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and then
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fall
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fell
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 gradually
at
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in
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 2010 with
slight
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a slight
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 elevation in 2012. At the outset of the period, China
begin
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began
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 with slight percentages, which is nearly 3%,
the
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which
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 showed
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 elevation in 2000, after that
indicate
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indicated
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 an upward trend to
reached
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reach
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it
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its
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peaked
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peak
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at
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in
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 2012.
On the other hand
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, India is one
out
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apply
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of four nations that represent
small
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a small
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 percentage, in 1990 it
is
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was
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 just 3% and
the
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they
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remain
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remained
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 stable until 2000, after
that
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that,
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 it
move
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moved
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 a little bit higher in 2010, but
decrease
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decreased
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 in 2012
about
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to about
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 1% lower than 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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