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The table below shows the minimum number of public holidays that companies are required to give their full-time workers in six countries in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the minimum number of public holidays that companies are required to give their full-time workers in six countries in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates the number of public
holidays
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 for full-time
worker
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workers
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was
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apply
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permitted
from
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by
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 companies in 6
difference
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different
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 countries in 2016.
Overall
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, Finland had the
hightest
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highest
 total paid
holidays
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 for full-time
worker
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workers
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,
whereas
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 Japan had the lowest
holidays
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on
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in
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this
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categories
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category
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. The first point to
noted
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note
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 is that
,
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 The companies in Finland paid
at
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for
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 a quarter of
vacations
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vacation
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days
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 and one
in
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apply
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tenth
at
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for
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 public
holiday
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holidays
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, had the
hightest
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highest
 country there
was
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apply
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paid on
tatal
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total
holidays
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. Followed by, Sweden and Australia paid
vacation
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 at 25
days
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,
20
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and 20
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days
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 respectively.
Whereas
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 there were paid less on public
holidays
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,
but
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apply
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total paid
holidays
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 were the second and third highest
holidays
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 when compared with other countries.
However
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, the lowest of companies that paid
holidays
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 was Japan at 10
days
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 in
vacation
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 ,
was
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were
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 allowed
spending
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to spend
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 time on public
vacation
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. In resulting
at
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apply
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10
days
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 for
tatol
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Tatol
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holidays
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. China and
USA
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the USA
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 were
similarly
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 trend on public
holidays
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 at 10
days
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 equally,
whereas
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 China has paid on
vacation
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day
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days
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 lower than
USA
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the USA
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a
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apply
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half.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words holidays, days, vacation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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