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Band 3

Task1. You saw an advertisement that your friend need that item. Where you saw? Why you think it is good for your friend? Explain the advertisement

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Dear Sarah , yesterday I came across
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 advertisement
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 a job vacancy that was exactly related to what you were looking for. If I am not mistaken It was on a LinkedIn page of a professor who is looking for a teaching assistant temporarily.
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 to stay here in Tehran only for a year,
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 would be a perfect opportunity to spend your time and advance your expertise to enhance your CV to a more potent one. The explanation for
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 assistantship was emphasizing
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the timing. The professor’s requirement
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staying
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 long shifts
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 his chemistry laboratory until 8 pm.
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, in the description
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 he mentioned that the candidate must not have any respiratory health condition since the exposure to chemicals in the laboratory rounds may be dangerous to sensitive individuals. I hope
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 letter helps you find your desired position as soon as possible. Kind regards, Narges amin

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coherence and cohesion
Consider starting with a more engaging introduction that states the purpose of your letter more clearly.
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Make sure to provide more specific examples of how the job aligns with your friend's skills or career goals to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure your points flow logically from one to the next, connecting the ideas more seamlessly for better clarity.
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You have included relevant information about the job advertisement and how it aligns with your friend's situation.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a friendly tone, making it personal and engaging for your friend.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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