The bar chart bellow shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000

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The bar chart below provides information about the input sectors as a percentage of India’s gross domestic product over a

period

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of 40 years. Generally

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the service shows a significant

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throughout the

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while

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agriculture

decline

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declined

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over the given

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. And industry grew the smallest. On the one hand, agriculture, in 1960 was

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highest

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the highest

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point, 60

percent

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per cent

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, but from 1970 and 1990

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almost

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for

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apply

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percent

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per cent

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in 2000

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the agriculture

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agriculture

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agricultural

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trend sharply fell

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percentage

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per cent

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services

increase

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continuously for 40 years.Started

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1960

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about 20% and in 1980 with nearly 30% the percentage of services rose steadily

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apply

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Compare

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the

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apply

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1990 and 2000 when services grew rapidly(more than 10%),

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of the

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reached

greatest

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rate.

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hand

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industry displayed

climb

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slowly.In 1960 had

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a percentage of

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over

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apply

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10% and until 1980 increased

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by less

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than 10%.

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from 1980 and 2000 barely declined showing more than 20%.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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154 words

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