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Band 3.5

You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel . Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangement. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend will cost. Also enquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel .

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Dear Sir/
maam
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ma'am
madam
, I am writing a letter to make an arrangement
to
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for
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 your lovely hotel which I found
out in
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on
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 the
internet
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Internet
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. My family and I are planning to have a holiday at the beach
this
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 coming weekend and your hotel was great to check in. June 5 at 7 pm is our
arriving
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arrival
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 at your establishment and we are looking for a 2 VIP room with double bed in each room since we are 4. If
it
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it is
it was
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 possible we like a
rooms
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room
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 that
are facing at
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faces
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 the beachfront. I would like
also
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 to ask about the cost
for
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of
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 the 2
nigths
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nights
 and 2 days stay. thank
alot
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a lot
 Faithfully yours, Rob

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Task Achievement
Make sure to include a clear subject line in the letter, such as 'Booking Inquiry'. This will help the hotel understand the purpose right away.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a more formal salutation, such as 'Dear Sir/Madam' instead of 'Dear Sir/maam'. Additionally, ensure you always check for spelling errors in words like 'thank you' instead of 'thank alot'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to separate each idea into a distinct paragraph. For example, create one paragraph for your booking details and another for your inquiries about costs and activities.
Task Achievement
The letter clearly states your intention to book rooms and specifies the number and type of rooms needed, which is great!
Task Achievement
Your enthusiasm for your stay is clear, which adds a nice personal touch to the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • seaside hotel
  • weekend getaway
  • arrangements
  • arrival
  • departure
  • double room
  • family suite
  • cost breakdown
  • amenities
  • places of interest
  • tourist attractions
  • local cuisine
  • childcare services
  • itinerary
  • reservation
  • local excursions
  • leisure activities
  • promotional offers
  • price quotation
  • sea view
  • recreational facilities
  • proximity
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