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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, has or train between I 970 and 2030

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, has or train between I 970 and 2030
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The line chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the number of
people
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traveling
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travelling
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 using
car
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,
bus
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 and train in the UK over a 61-year
period
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 from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
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, the amount of
the
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passengers
traveling
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travelling
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 by
car
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 and train increased,
while
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 of those who used the
bus
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 decreased throughout the
period
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. Between 1970 and 2000, the number of
people
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traveling
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travelling
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 by
car
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 increased from 5 to under 7
million
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 and plateaued AT
this
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 value. The
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who
traveled
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travelled
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 by
bus
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 decreased constantly from about 4
million
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 at the beginning of the
period
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 to 3
million
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in
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at
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 the end
,
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 and became the lowest value.
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 of the
period
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, the number of
car
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 and train
travelers
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travellers
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 reached their highest point, which
were
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was
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 9 and 7
million
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 respectively.
Also
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at the end
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 of the
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period
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period,
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 there is the biggest difference between the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who use the
car
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 and the
bus
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 (6
million
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people
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).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, bus, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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