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The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the age distribution of
Uk travelers
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UK travellers
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 visiting
to
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Spain in 1983 and 2003.
Overall
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, there was
a
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an
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 upward trend in most of
demographics
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the demographics
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with
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,
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 except for
34
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the 34
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-54 and 25-34 groups. Notably,
trip
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the trip
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 to Spain attracted the tourists aged 35-54 the most in both years despite a temporary decline. In 1983, the 35-to-54-year-old group led with half of all visitors,
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 it exhibited a significant reduction by 15%, accounting for just 35% in 2003. A similar but lower level can be seen in the adults aged from 25 to 34,
this
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 figure represented
one fifth
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one-fifth
 in the first period before dropping by 8% in the end. Regarding
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 remaining groups,
although
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 the percentage of
teenager
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teenage
 tourists visiting
to
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Spain only made up for 4%, it soared dramatically with 15%, placing
the
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third.
Similarly
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,
The
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the
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 youngest segment started at 10% in
1983
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1983,
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then
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 saw a slight escalation by 2%. Meanwhile, the oldest cohort witnessed a
sustantial
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substantial
 increase by 10%, placing it
the
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 second.

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