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The plans below show the layout of a universities sports centre now, and how it will look after development

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The plans illustrate the supposed development in the design of a university's
sprt
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sports
 centre. And compare it with the current layout.
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, obviously, the design of the
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sport
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sports
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 centre will be expanded dramatically, by adding a number of entertainment amenities. In terms of the current layout, by entering through the reception, there is a
25 meter
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 pool, that
surrounded
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is surrounded
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 by a gym from from north and a seating area from
east
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the east
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,
besides
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 a changing room from
west
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the west
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. Outside, there are two outdoor courts
in
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 each
sides
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 of the current
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sport
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sports
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 centre.
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, the developmental plan depicts essential changes.
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 to say, the outdoor courts at the west will be replaced by a leisure pool.
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While the
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 other one
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that
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 is located
at
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on
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 the east side, is going to be exchanged
by
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for
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 a sports hall.
Moreover
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, two dance studios will be added at the far east part of the intended renewal picture.
Finally
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, two changing rooms,
as well as
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 a cafe, and
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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 shop, all these accessories will be placed along the south part of the new
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sport
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sports
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centres
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 layout.

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language
Make sure to correct the minor spelling mistakes (e.g., 'sport' should be 'sports').
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Improve the clarity of some sentences to enhance comprehension, and consider using more varied vocabulary.
coherence
Ensure smoother transitions between points to create better cohesion.
task achievement
You provided a clear overall impression of the changes in layout, which adds to the understanding of the development plan.
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Your essay includes a comparison of current features and new amenities, showcasing your understanding of the diagrams.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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