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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast food. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shows below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast food. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shows below.
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The bar graph illustrates
tthe
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the
 amount of
income
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 that different financial
housholds
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households
 spent on fast food,
while
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the line graph represents the
increase
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 and decrease
of
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in
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 popular fast foods in the United Kingdom
in
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apply
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between 1970
to1990
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and to1990
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.
It is clear that
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low
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low-income
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income
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housholds
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households
 tend to
avoide
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avoid
 eating out,
while
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high
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high-income
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income
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 families
finding
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find
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hamburgers
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 as a
stapel
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staple
 food.
Middel
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Middle
income
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housholds
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households
 tend to make use of fast food
restuarants
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restaurants
quit
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quite
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regulary
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regularly
regular
. Fish and
chips
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 popularity had a rapid
increase
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 during the 1980's with
hamburgers
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 following in 1885. Pizzas
slight
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slightly
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 dropping as a favourite from the 1970's
Houshold
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Household
Households
 with large amounts of
income
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 relied
of
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apply
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on
hambu
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Bambu
 During the 1970
hamburgers
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 and fish&
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chips
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chips,
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 both found
themseves
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themselves
 below
a
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apply
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100
while
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 the favourite of the
,
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apply
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 pizzas
stand
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stood
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 at 300. Over the years both fish&
chips
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 and
hamburgars
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hamburgers
 had a slight
increase
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 and from
1980's
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1980s
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 both jumped up in popularity with fish&
chips
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 rising to 500 and
hamburgers
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 close to 300. Pizza had a gradual decrease over
the
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apply
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time reaching to
and
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an
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all time
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all-time
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 low in 1985 to 200.
from
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From
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this
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 point a slight
increase
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 was recorded.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, increase, hamburgers, chips with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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