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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams illustrate the outline of the sports centre in the university right now and its appearance after reconstruction.
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, it can be seen that all
facilities
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the facilities
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 which are already present will be untouched except for a gym. The size of the gym will be extended significantly.
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, a myriad of other buildings will be constructed in the future
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 of the outdoor courts on both sides of the entrance. First of all,
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changing room, pool, seating and reception will remain unchanged. Meanwhile, the area of the gym is going to be enlarged to the east and it will be almost twice bigger than now.
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, to the east of these structures will be built a sports hall and two separate dance studios.
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, to the right of the entrance in the
south west
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southwest
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 part of the map will be a cafe and changing room. On the other side, to the west of the already existing facility, a huge leisure pool will be located, covering the entire area of the outdoor courts. Notably, a sports shop and one more changing room will be situated on the south of that pool on the left of the entry.

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Consider adding an introductory statement that outlines the main features of both the current and future designs, as this will provide a clearer context for the reader.
coherence
Use linking words such as 'however', 'in addition', and 'similarly' to improve the flow of ideas and to connect your points more effectively.
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Try to expand on the specific features of the new facilities, as this will demonstrate a more comprehensive understanding of the diagram and enhance your response.
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Good descriptive language is used to convey changes and layout.
coherence
The overall layout and planned changes are clearly summarized and structured in the essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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