You are watching television and saw a program being shown early in the morning that contained a lot of violence. You believe the program is unsuitable for that time of day. Write a letter to the manager of the television station. In your letter :- Give reason for writing. Explain what you think the problem is with the program. Say what you would like the station manager to do.

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Dear Manager, I would like to express my views towards a
show
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your channel which is shown early in the morning called "
Talktive
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Talkative
roadies". As you know , in
the
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todays
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today's
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world all people are
workaholic
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workaholics
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and
morning
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the morning
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is the time to go for
job
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a job
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.
Also
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, it's my
habbit
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habit
to watch
tv
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TV
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programmes in the morning
while
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preparing my lunch .
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, "Talktive Roadies" is a
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about
an
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adults who compete with each other and use aggression and abusive language with each other which I find not suitable for
aundience
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audiences
audience
in the early morning to start a day .
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, No one can deny the fact that it is a good thriller
show
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to watch but it
also
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contain
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 some vulgarity which is not good for youngsters to watch at the start of the day . Undoubtedly, the timing of the
show
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is
uncovenient
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inconvenient
convenient
. It should be telecast in the evenings .
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, with a cup of
tea
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everyone will
be enjoy
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it . I hope you will understand my concerns and will work on it as soon as
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the letter
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reached
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you. Yours sincerely,

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clarity
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct minor spelling mistakes and improve clarity.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to strengthen your argument.
cohesion
Try to structure your sentences more clearly, and consider varying your sentence length for better flow.
task achievement
You have addressed the purpose of the letter and expressed your concerns clearly.
greeting and closing
Your closing is polite and appropriate for a formal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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