A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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day I have been exercising.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • physical activity
  • mindfulness
  • chronic diseases
  • health check-ups
  • processed foods
  • mental health
  • nutrients
  • emotional support
  • obesity prevention
  • screenings
  • preventive healthcare
  • supportive social network
  • nutritional education
  • adequate sleep
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