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The charts below show the average precentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

The charts below show the average precentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much
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The pie charts illustrate the consumption of three different sorts of nutrients (
sodium
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, saturated
fats
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 and added
sugar
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) during breakfast, lunch, snacks and dinner in the USA. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it can be seen that dinner is an unhealthy meal during the day,
whereas
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 breakfast is the healthiest one. With regard to lunch, all these nutrients are nearly in
an
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equal
amount
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amounts
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. Meanwhile, snacks contain almost half of the added
sugar
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 per day.
To begin
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 with, an average American consumes approximately 15% of
sodium
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, saturated
fats
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 and added
sugar
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 at breakfast.
Also
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, the consumption of these products at lunch is quite moderate and accounts for
sodium
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 (29%), saturated
fats
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 (26%) and added
sugar
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 (19%).
On the contrary
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, people ate slightly less than half of added
sugar
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 (42%)
at
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 snacks, almost a quarter of saturated
fats
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 (21%) and
sodium
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 (14%).
Moreover
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, it can be observed that the amount of
sodium
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 and saturated
fats
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 prevails at dinner 43% and 37%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, fats, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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