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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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 research said that now is the best time in history to be living. In my opinion, even
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life
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 was difficult in
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the old
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 century, everyone was so
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healthy
 and happy despite the lack of technology rather
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this
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days.
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, I would be interested to live in
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 days.
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 to technology. First of all, humanity lived
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 plenty of centuries. Every year has some difficulties,
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 as wars, diseases, natural disasters, etc.
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, people have been destroyed many times. Particularly, in the periods before 2000.
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, with
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technological developments
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humans
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 can fix all of
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.
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, they can find a solution for natural damage, climate change,some
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 of diseases, etc. There are numerous advantages of living in the present time.
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, almost no country is at war, everyone lives in peace. Folks do not die because of diseases, human
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 has increased.
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 to today's
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 conditions, we improved healthcare and longer
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life
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 expectancy. Natural disasters still happen, but
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 to special equipment, we can detect them in advance and take precautions, and they do not cause destruction.
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access to correct information is easy, we can keep in contact with the global news. In conclusion,
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, I definitely prefer to live in present. Because today
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 numerous opportunities for longer
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. So
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 why, researchers are totally right
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with
 their views. Now is the best time in history to be living.

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task achievement
Your arguments are relevant, but expanding on a few points could provide a more comprehensive view. You should explain why people were healthy and happy in the past despite technological limitations.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your sentences flow well from one to the next. Including more transitional phrases can improve coherence, helping the reader follow your thoughts more easily.
coherence and cohesion
There are some grammatical errors and typos (e.g., 'kife' instead of 'life', 'this days' instead of 'these days'). Proofreading will help reduce these mistakes.
task achievement
You effectively highlight the advantages of the present era, which aligns well with the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay presents a clear opinion and includes a persuasive conclusion, which is a strong aspect.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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