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The map show the lay out of a university campus in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map show the lay out of a university campus in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps depict the development of the university campus layout from 2010 to the present.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
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 some of the departments
has
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 expanded
while
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,
while
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maintenaning
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maintaining
 the same area.
However
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, the
center
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centre
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 of the lake has been untouched throughout the period.
According to
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 the drafts, it is noticeable that
,
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 in 2010 the restaurants and shops were
spreded
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spread
speeded
 across the area,
however
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, it has now
intergrated
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integrated
 into a single building called
student
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 facilities by demolishing the old restaurant and shopping complex.
In addition
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 to that,
teaching
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the teaching
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 block has been
seperated
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separated
 into two buildings,
while
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 not only constructing a new art building but
also
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 replacing the university office with the new science faculty.
Furthermore
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, the office building has moved
in
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 the the
student
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 facility complex. On
one
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the one
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 hand, the
student
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 accommodation
center
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centre
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 which was located
on
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in
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 the top left corner now has expanded
in to
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 two buildings,
moreover
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, a new accommodation building has
been
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replaced the shopping
permises
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premises
.
On the other hand
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,
lake
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the lake
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 has been untouched throughout the development
while
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, clearing the
learn
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 and seating area.
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,
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 the main road has been undeveloped throughout the period, a new routine has
be
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 built in order to
easy
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 access
of
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the
student
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 accommodation which is located in
south
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the south
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 left corner.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • facilities
  • allocation
  • proximity
  • academic building
  • dormitories
  • commute
  • strategically positioned
  • research
  • study
  • physical education
  • extracurricular activities
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented
  • environment
  • social interaction
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