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The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the development of usage of 7 different mobile features by each
individuals
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individual
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 over a period of 4 years from 2006 to 2010.
Overall
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, It is evident from the table that, the majority of people used the mobile phone to make calls,
whereas
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, the least popular
feature
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 was playing music. In
additional
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 to that the total amount of mobile phone usage
was
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 improved throughout the years. Looking at the table more closely,
it is clear that
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, the number of people
play
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 games on mobiles witnessed a dramatic surge from 17 in 2006 to 42 in 2008,
then
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 it maintained
in
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at
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 a
stedy
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steady
study
 level until 2010, at 41.
Moreover
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, searching the internet and recording
video
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videos
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 were not an option in 2006,
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however
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however,
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 the number rose in 2008 to
a
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apply
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level
at
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apply
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41 and 9 respectively, experiencing a rapid jump.
In contrast
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, making calls was the
feature
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 which was used mostly,
while
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 maintaining the interest at a
stedy
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steady
study
 level at around 99%.
In addition
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 to that, in 2006, 73% of users used the text message
feature
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,
whereas
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, the number for
same
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the same
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feature
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 saw a slight improvement by 2% in 2008,before surpassing 80% in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words feature with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • features
  • usage
  • between 2006 and 2010
  • trends
  • increasing
  • decreasing
  • popularity
  • basic features
  • advanced features
  • internet browsing
  • playing games
  • significant changes
  • emerging trends
  • speculate
  • comparison
  • over time
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