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People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about advantages and disadvantages of each view point?

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Nowadays, It's common in human nature that they have different expectations from their jobs. Few individuals like to do
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job
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 for their whole life but there are some different
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 of human beings as well and they like to
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change
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job
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 frequently, both
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things have their own pros and cons that we will discuss in
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 essay. On the one hand, few people
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wants
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 to stay in one
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 until the end of their working life because they
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 that if they
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continue
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 for the same
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, it has some
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 for them like, they will know everything about that
firm
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 deeply, they become more and more familiar with working atmosphere, they will get a promotion and higher wage after working few years, they become more friendly with colleagues. But it has some disadvantages
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, they will stuck
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 place for their whole life, they will not get
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 to learn any different things, they will not
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 to know what's going on in
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, many individuals like to
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 frequently. The main reason behind
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 is they are getting higher
wage
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 and
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 in
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firm
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, and it is a big advantage of changing
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job
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 to
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 some people do not like to work in
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 for years they are thinking that if they
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company
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, they will get
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different knowledge about
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, they will get a chance to know more people and it will increase their ability to learn and knowledge. But it has
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 own downsides
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 because if they
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change
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 their roles continuously, they will not get
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 properly and deeply about any
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, and it will
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 their resume and when
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firm
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 will hire you first they will think that you will leave their
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 in
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 time of period because you do not have
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 of your work in your resume. In conclusion, it depends from person to person whether they want to
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 their jobs continuously or they want to stick with one
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 because each
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 have many advantages and disadvantages
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure you clearly structure your paragraphs with clear topic sentences and cohesive devices to enhance flow
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Provide more detailed examples to support your points further to enhance clarity and depth of your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Use transitional phrases to connect ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
You effectively identified advantages and disadvantages of both job preferences, which showcases an understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the main points well, indicating a good overall understanding of the essay's argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job stability
  • predictability
  • career advancement
  • work-life balance
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • complacency
  • networking
  • instability
  • professional growth
  • job satisfaction
  • salary increments
  • versatile
  • routine
  • challenges
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