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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Driverless
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vehicles
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 a surge in demand in recent times.The future is transforming towards
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 cars,buses, and trucks which will result in the only people travelling inside these automobiles being passengers.
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 essay will discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of
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 transformation. On the one hand,
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 shift will significantly reduce the efforts of people, as they will travel just by mentioning the destination they want to visit to the vehicle.
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, there will be no driving stress when they
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 home after
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 work day.
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, accidents will be dramatically reduced because artificial intelligence will be taking care of
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driving.In
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 cases, there will be no scope for human error.
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, Tesla car maintains a minimum distance of 20 meters between cars from the front in
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 mode.
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,when the distance between them is reduced by more than 20 meters breaks will be automatically applied.
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vehicles
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 are even safe for travel.
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 transformation will negatively impact the employment of
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.Because, many truck ,car and bus
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 will be replaced by automated machines
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, companies try cost-cutting and fire unwanted employees.
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Twitter
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 company laid off 40% of their workforce after finding out that AI alone could do what 40 per cent of the fired employees could do.Moving to self-driving cars will challenge the job of
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 and their livelihood. In conclusion,Transforming completely to self-driving
vehicles
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 will challenge the livelihood of truck,car,and bus
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 but it will reduce the efforts of people and guarantee the safety of passengers.In my opinion,the advantages of
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vehicles
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 outweigh the disadvantages.

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Ensure there is a consistent spacing after punctuation marks, particularly in your introduction and throughout the essay.
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Make sure to elaborate a bit more on the advantages and disadvantages to strengthen your argument, particularly with more concrete examples.
style
Consider varying your sentence structures more to keep the reader engaged and improve the flow of your writing.
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The essay presents a clear opinion and addresses both sides of the argument.
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You have provided relevant examples that clearly connect to your points, such as the Tesla example and the Twitter layoffs.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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